Relavent: We Are
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A man named Andrew wrote the first piece, or first part of the piece on a poetry group which I am a part of, and I was inspired to write the next piece, or second half. 

He said I can use his part if I wish, so here I am doing just that, and thinking about using it for open mic nights. 

I hope you will enjoy it.

 

They ask us to vote
And we have no reply
Your voice can and will be heard.


We scoff in their faces
News is evolving everyday
We choose not to notice.


History being written in front of our eyes
We close them tightly.


Question authority
We question those who question.


A change can be made
We can spark the fire.


Educate and speak
We can be relevant again!

 

I found his writting to be very enjoyable, but that it could be added to, although standing well on its own.
So, I then wrote:


Once we open our eyes,
We will see the prize.

Our world granted to us by the many, the we.
United as one; untied, and undone.
We will win a victory for all.

A true, and lasting freedom.
Freedom from opresson is not dumb.

Freedom from the chains of war.
Freedom from the chains of our Fashistic whore.

Once the guns of the corrupted world cop just drop,
We all will cop a pop of the true freedom.
The greatest truth is that it allready has begun.


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His part...
By Superduperficial May 23rd 2007 at 4:56 am EDT
...is mediocre, yours is worse.

This couplet jumped out at me as especially facile:

"Question authority
We question those who question."

We can, should, and do question both.
Re: His part...
By Superduperficial May 23rd 2007 at 3:20 pm EDT
Also, you might want to fix the spelling error in the title.
  
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